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[Satoshi99]

This is my first ever written screenplay. I wrote it as a practice.
I had a desire to write in the spirit of Angel TvShow with a little upgrades when it comes to Angel as a vampire.
I have always found Angel to be played down. Even Joss Whedon admitted that Angel had suppose to be darker than "Buffy The Vampire Slayer". It is no one to blame, it was just the politics of the TvNetwork.

I appreciate your time for reading my screenplay.
I appreciate your honesty in your comments.


Your love for the TvShow earned you the pleasure that awaits.
Have a good read.

 

[Mr Trick]

This is my first ever written screenplay. I wrote it as a practice.
I had a desire to write in the spirit of Angel TvShow with a little upgrades when it comes to Angel as a vampire.
I have always found Angel to be played down. Even Joss Whedon admitted that Angel had suppose to be darker than "Buffy The Vampire Slayer". It is no one to blame, it was just the politics of the TvNetwork.

I appreciate your time for reading my screenplay.
I appreciate your honesty in your comments.


Your love for the TvShow earned you the pleasure that awaits.
Have a good read.

Hey, am going to read this today. Don't get down hearted, it will just take a bit of time for people to respond. This is cool as you seem to know much more about professional screenplay writing than me so I might take a few hints myself🙂 Get back to you later.

 

[Mr Trick]

@Satoshi99 Hey just read it and enjoyed it! It was an interesting concept, and I thought you got the moody, but also deadpan and funny tone of Angel really nicely. There were some good character interaction, and I liked the stuff with Johnson at the end. I wasn't so keen on the Monroe thread, it just didn't seem to serve much of a purpose, and just seem to be shoehorning another famous figure in there, her interactions with Angel weren't the best. Certain scenes did drag a bit as well, but mostly I thought it was really interesting, and engrossing, and could make for strong episode. I did spot a couple of grammer/spelling mistakes which I could fix for you, but I will go back over it again at some point.

Keep up the good work!🙂

 

[Satoshi99]

I appreciate your time for reading , as I stated all ready.
No need to correct the mistakes , my friend did it all ready. I just did not want to extract the screenplay to PDF again.