Faith past : Too far ?

[Lulladreamy]

I post this thread to ask you ur mind or advise about the story I'm posting in the fanfic part.
Not still, but soon, I'll post a part that I've wrote which is kind of, hard or something, and I wonder if I went too far.
I'd like to know what you think of it ? Do you think I'm far from what she could have lived ? Do you think that what I'm writing isn't appropriate to the character we all like ?
Do you think I'm writing a too much pathetic story ?

 

[doobles2]

Where's the fanfic?

 

[Frenchy Faith]

Check Lulla's (me) post if you wanna find it. I haven't edited it disappeared from the page but if you click on the post I wrote under Lulla's name you will find it ! :d