I love the first one! Suuuuch a good scene though like you said very sad. I like the lil images on the side showing how Will became SVW.
In my opinion, the second one is a good idea, like the shape around it, but it's too fuzzy and we can barely see the images... maybe you can lower the effect but still keep it? like there must be some kind of making it less fuzzy but keep that idea of the turmoil conveys by the water drop or whatever effect it is.