am not a poet in any, way, shape or form - but here goes anyway.
Apply this to what couple you will:
Unconsciously at the back of his mind,
Eden's paradise shimmers and sighs,
Forever, yet unrealised, he'll find,
What was eternally lost trembling tries
To tear apart the mirage of her smile,
Within that woman's winding grace of walk,
Sleeps the sinuous serpents fearful beguile,
The lulled corrosive nature of her talk
Like poison softly slips inside his ear,
Truths alter, appear, change and disappear.
Yet as she wraps herself around his mind,
He only senses, cannot clearly find,
That entwined they'll uncover a flaw serpentine.
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There, do tell me what you think. Oh I posted this on another board and someone told me my ryhme sceme was messed up in the final stanza, so I will give you my explination:
there's 'ear' and 'disappear' which mess it up - this is done on purpose as truths alter etc so does the rhyme pattern to mimic the meaning. And you'll notice the last line has one too many syllables to echo the 'flaw' spoken about in that line. the last three lines rhyme because I cant go back to every other line rhyming, that would have made the break in pattern pointless.
I in no way assume you lot are a stupid as that person, but I thought I'd just cover myself!
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