The Real End

Tainted Hope

Beautiful Disaster
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I'm experimenting with script form story telling. Please tell me what you think. This is set after "Your Welcome", and there after shall be an alternate season end. Hopefully it will come out properly, but if not, it's not my fault- it's MW, or this post thing. 😉 :kiss2:

~ Lexi xoxo



TEASER​

EXT. WOLFRAM AND HART "“ DAY

CUT TO:​

EXT. GOOD SAMARITAN HOSPITAL- ACROSS THE STREET FROM WR&H

PAN TO:​

EXT. 5TH FLOOR, FOURTH WINDOW FROM THE LEFT

The window is closed, with the blinds drawn down.
Without warning, a bright glow flashes around the blinds. It stops after a split second.​

FADE TO BLACK

END TEASER​

INT. WOLFRAM AND HART "“ ANGEL'S OFFICE "“ NIGHT

PAN TO:​

ANGEL's desk. A folder sits on it with the letters printed, "Cordelia Chase". A red "˜X' is marked across it.​

PULL BACK TO REVEAL:​

ANGEL pacing across the floor, holding behind his back a stuffed folder.

ANGEL:
Okay, Angel, you can do this. Cordelia is never going to wake up. She never did. Sleeping with Nina isn't hurting her. It can't hurt her. She's in a coma. She's never going to wake up.​

CUT TO:​

The door opens.​

ENTER HARMONY

HARMONY:
Hey, boss, just wanted to let you know that blonde girl is here. She said she had to talk to you. Can I eat her?​

HARMONY smiles widely.​

PULL BACK:
ON CAMERA: ANGEL, HARMONY​

ANGEL:
(frustrated)
No! Listen, Harmony, if you want to help, go sit at your desk. Answer phones. At least pretend your working.​

HARMONY:
(offended)
Geez, Mr. Cranky, if I knew you were in a bad mood, I would have never told you that Buffy was here.​

HARMONY huffs, turns around and slams the door.

ANGEL winces at the noise.​

ANGEL:
(to himself)
I hate when she does that.​

Two second pause.​

(shocked realization)
Did she say Buffy was here?​

ANGEL drops the files that were in his hands onto the floor and runs to the door. He throws it open and ANGEL EXITS.​

PAN TO:​

The files on the floor.​

PAN CLOSER:​

A file that clearly reads; Cordelia Chase has been moved across the street to the local hospital. She currently resides on the 5th floor, room 104.​

PULL BACK:​

A letter on top of the folder, clearly unopened, labeled ANGEL in a female's writing.​

FADE OUT​
 
I must say I'm intrigued. You do seem to have a hang of the transcript form, which can only get better in time....and the story gets one engrossed right away.

I'd be very interested to see how this tale develops.

Show us what ya got. :: tu ::
 
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