a poem

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...my soul is wrapped in harsh repose
midnight descends
in raven coloured clothes
but soft, behold
a sun light beam
cutting a swath of glimmering gleam
my heart expands
'tis grown a bulge in it
inspired by your beauty
effulgent


what ya think?
i wrote it all by myself:whistle:
 
It's funny how we were lead to believe that poem sucked during the flashbacks, then when Spike recited it in "Not Fade Away," it kicked ASS. You know . . . for a poem.
 
white avenger
white avenger
I always kinda liked it, even from the first. It was a part of the Spike/William character, just like the black leather duster. I can't say the same for that "hark, the lark" thing, though.
Angelic Slayer
Angelic Slayer
Very true... I think it just sounded that much "cooler"-- more serious from Spike's mouth rather than his human counterpart! :D
I think it's a nice poem...of course I don't know if I could tell good poetry from bad poetry in English, but maybe this poem was just like...hm, let's say about maybe 125 years ahead of it's time?
 
well i like it and it was my sign BB(before banner^^)This next one's called "The Wanton Folly of Me Mum". 😛
 
The poem is not as bad as we were led to believe about willys poetry. Compared to some of the pish I've read that was intently serious, willys poem is a work of art.
 
The poem is not as bad as we were led to believe about willys poetry. Compared to some of the pish I've read that was intently serious, willys poem is a work of art.

Just because other poems are worse, doesn't mean it's not completely horrendous.
 
I know he did another poem, but did he ever say that poem. I know he says the title but does he actually say that poem? "The Wanted Folly Of Me Mum" one not the other one
 
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